I like the second half quite a bit, but the intro bits where the music swells then comes to a screeching halt before starting again causes a bit of an audio pop that might be slightly harsher to headphone users. Well composed overall, but there is definitely a way to smooth out the intro and keep the melody going.
Keep practicing and you'll get there. :)
Edit: Only talking about the near audio pops, instrumentally I enjoy it. :)