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Onyx looks pretty happy for being defeated. :P
Not bad, if you added a little bit of extra animation for the Squirtle (like having him lurch a bit forwards or take a couple of steps), it would make it so the Onyx would actually crush him when he collapses. As it stands the Squirtle just disappears into a puddle of blood.
A few tweaks and this animation will be golden. Good work!

SalehtheAnimator responds:

Does it really look that much like Onyx was defeated? He just fell over. Well, guess I can only blame myself.

Not bad! Script and voice wise this is fairly funny, so most improvements would mostly be coming from the animation itself.

-Your characters usually stay in a single pose while talking. If you added some additional movement, such as blinking or arm/body movements; they would seem less stiff and become more animated.
-Lip sync is pretty good! This is a minor critic, but I would suggest you double check line thickness when you use a shape tween for mouth movements.
-For future explosion scenes, having glass shatter or having debris fly out will add to the devastation effect you were going for.

Some improvements here and there and this will be even better. Keep it man! :P

Mewx responds:

Thanks! :)

Not bad for a short animation. However there are a few things that would make this better.
-Adding some sound effects when the Diglet slides in and when the Snorlax spews rainbows would make the movie less silent and overall less empty.
-Having the Snorlax exhibit some movement (wobbling, arm movement etc...) while shooting the rainbow out would add to the animation and make it seem more fluid.
-Having the Pokemon in the top left move up and down slightly as the animation goes on will prevent it from looking like its attached to the wall and more as a character.
-Having an end screen with a "Repeat Movie?" button will make the animation have a clear end, and prevent it from looping continuously.

A few tweaks and extra sound effects and this animation will be a bit better.
Hopefully the next one will be even better. :P

BrownOceanMan responds:

Thanks for the tips man. I'm actually working on another animation and I'll make sure it's way better than this poop.

Cripes! That was brutal. :P

Animation and character wise I don't have any suggestions for improvement, the shading is well done and the animation is very fluid.
What I CAN suggest is maybe adding a little bit of extra detail for the mountain hills in the background. Perhaps a couple of closer hills with shading.
Other than this is really good, great work!

hbrunav responds:

Thanks! I had little time to make this, I had to rush on the backgrounds

This was well done!
The animation was pretty fluid throughout, however if you could add a little bit more when it shows Luigi being intense behind Mario (moustache blowing in the wind, wheel lines etc...), then the movie would be that much better.

Good work overall though! :P

k7vin responds:

Thank you for the praise and the helpful critique. And I'm glad you enjoyed it!

From what I've seen of gameplay, this pretty much sums it up. :P
Good work on the animation, only thing I can really suggest is maybe adding a few more details on the trees in the background. (bark details, leaves on the ground etc...)

Keep up the good work!

WooleyWorld responds:

Just you wait. :]

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